Dunso 2010-06-28 09:55:50

I think it was an awesome episode, though I don't quite get everything going on. Like the Primal Wars series.

Dunso 2010-06-28 09:56:27

And are you going to finish that by the way?

Dunso 2010-06-28 10:10:42

I understand the time it takes you. I have flash unlike some people that think theres nothing to it. They really annoy me!

beastkid7 2010-07-02 08:07:24

Dude I love this series and the last ones animation was great!

You really need to emerse your audience into the story though. I think what your laking is not plot ...but plot structure. Like it feels like half the story is in your head and not being told.

Intro ...tell everyone who she is -or tell them she doesn't know who she is, maybe shes searching for answers.

Rising action -play on the character you already have. Pit her against an enemy. Introduce a conflict. God knows Its awesome to see a hot chick fight Zombies. But it involves the audience so much more when they know why there fighting and are rooting for a particular side.

Climax -Well your not there yet but it makes it so much more intense if we know who she is and care if she lives or dies.

Oh and try to get a voice for her if you can. (if it fits with the plan) it shouldn't be that hard. I'm sure there are plenty of NG girls/voice actors who would audition two be her voice.

But Keep it up Bro I really enjoy them ...I have no idea how you do it all.

PS-I'm making GINA fanart. PM-ya when its done. :D

lupo87 2010-07-02 20:56:45

What's the time frame on the last PW chapter being done? Not rushing you, just curious.

Pencil-Crusher 2010-09-02 11:10:55

Hey Rick...no new updates :)